In class we have been writing poems about New Zealand. Our focus was to describe New Zealand creatively through one colour and include rhyme. First we had to pick a colour that we think represents our wonderful country the most, I picked green as my colour because green reminds me of New Zealand's rolling hills and dense bush. Then we had to pick six things that were the same colour that we had chosen beforehand. I am up to publishing my poem so it's still a work in progress, but this is how it goes:
New Zealand is...
Leaves flittering in the breeze,
Covering all the tops of the trees.
Farms are dotted everywhere,
From top to bottom and here to there.
Soft green moss on the forest floor,
Keep on walking, you're bound to see more.
Bush surrounds everything,
And homes the birds that love to sing.
The rolling hills everywhere,
Makes the tourists want to stop and stare.
Please tell me what you think and I need some suggestions on what to draw on my published copy.
By Tylah.
You have used rhyme really well and I like the way you have almost described the green of New Zealand without actually stating the colour. Perhaps you could describe the moss in a different way to achieve this.
ReplyDeleteYou have done a really good job on rhyming . I like how you described the leaves ,maybe you could describe the bush?
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