Sunday, 29 March 2015

Poem, By Alyssa

The ball is bouncey and it bounces around the beach.
The trees are swishing and swaying down.
The sky is bright and colourful.
The pool is big with alot of splashing happening.
The buildings are high and colourful.

2 comments:

  1. Really cool piece Alyssa. Love the great descriptive language. The layout is also very good. Next step: Bit more length would be good because it was such a great piece. Molly Lourie, year 8, Toko school.

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  2. Awesome poem Alyssa! I like the way you described the scenery and I also like how you described how you felt at the time.
    Next Steps: Next time you could try and use some more advanced vocabulary But other then that fantastic writing piece.
    Rowan S, Year 8, Toko School.

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